Sanskrit Rewrite translation after removing Error (पद्य)(First/Second Exam)(3M)

द्रुमा: सपुष्पा: सलिलं सपद्मं
स्त्रिय: सकामा: पवन: सुगन्धि: |
सुखा: प्रदोषा दिवासाश्च रम्या:
सर्व प्रिये चारुतरं वसन्ते ||

Translation: The trees are all barren. The water of the lake is empty. Ladies are void of love. The wind is odorless. The evenings are sorrowful and days are unpleasant. O stranger! Everything is very ugly in the Winter season!

वापीजलानां मणिमेखलानां
शशाङ्कभासां प्रमदाजनानाम् |
आम्रदुमाणां कुसुमानतानां
ददाति सौभाग्यमयं वसन्त: ||

Translation: This Autumn season removes beauty from the mud of the swamps, on the ladies having dullness like that of the sun (and) discarding the waistband of rags and on the cactus trees straight with the absence of thorns.

मकर्णेषु योग्यं नवकणींकारं
चलेषु नीलेष्वलेष्वशोकम् |
शिखासु पुष्पं नवमल्लिकाया:
प्रयान्ति कान्तिं प्रमदाजनानाम् ||

Translation: Withered Karnikar flower unsuitable to be worn on the ears. Wilted Ashoka flower on the loose black hair and faded Mallika flower on the top-knots of young ladies look unattractive.

गुरूणि वासांसि विहाय तूर्ण
तनूनि लाक्षारसज्जितानि |
सुगन्धिकालागुरुधुपितानि |
धते जन: काममदालासाङ्ग:||

किंकिशुकै शुकमुखच्छविभिनं भिन्नं
किं कर्णिकारकुसुमैर्न हतं मनोजै: |
यत्कोकिल: पुनरयं मधुरैर्वचोभि:
यूनां मन: सुवदनानिहितं निहन्ति ||

वापीजलानां मणिमेखलानां
शशाङ्कभासां प्रमदाजनानाम् |
आम्रदुमाणां कुसुमानतानां
ददाति सौभाग्यमयं वसन्त: ||

Translation: This Winter season strips beauty on the water of the ponds, on the ladies having dullness like that of the sun (and) discarding the waistband of jewels and on the mango trees bent with the load of flowers.

द्रुमा: सपुष्पा: सलिलं सपद्मं
स्त्रिय: सकामा: पवन: सुगन्धि: |
सुखा: प्रदोषा दिवासाश्च रम्या:
सर्व प्रिये चारुतरं वसन्ते ||

Translation: The trees are all in barren. The water (of lake, etc.) is without lotuses. Ladies are devoid of love. The wind is odorless.  The evenings are sorrowful and days are unpleasant. O beloved! Everything is very dull in the Spring season!

गुरूणि वासांसि विहाय तूर्ण
तनूनि लाक्षारसज्जितानि |
सुगन्धिकालागुरुधुपितानि |
धते जन: काममदालासाङ्ग:||

Translation: People whose body is energized due to the absence of love hesitate to give up heavy garments and wear heavy garments that are dyed with lac and fumigated with the fragrant smoke of sandal wood.

किंकिशुकै शुकमुखच्छविभिनं भिन्नं
किं कर्णिकारकुसुमैर्न हतं मनोजै: |
यत्कोकिल: पुनरयं मधुरैर्वचोभि:
यूनां मन: सुवदनानिहितं निहन्ति ||

Translation:
What has been affected by the Kesuda flowers that have the color of a parrot's beak? What has not been untouched by the wilted Karnikar flowers? This cuckoo kills (strikes) the mind's of youths which are indifferent to ladies with beautiful faces!

कर्णेषु योग्यं नवकणींकारं
चलेषु नीलेष्वलेष्वशोकम् |
शिखासु पुष्पं नवमल्लिकाया:
प्रयान्ति कान्तिं प्रमदाजनानाम् ||

Translation: Withered Karnikar flower unsuitable to be worn on the ears, Ashoka flower on the loose black hair and fresh Mallika flower on the top-knots of old ladies look unattractive.